[waylon]

Rip 'er to shreds! Err, rather, Constructive criticism, please!



First, what I know is wrong.... I'd like to have used a more... diverse color scheme, and her shoulder plates are a bit out of alignment. And the composition is a bit boring. But all in all, I'm pretty pleased with the way it turned out. I just wanted to get some feedback before making any "final" adjustments.

[Rinaldo]

Hey thats really nice.

I would try to put a bit more colour into the armour, add a bit of the yellow and brown thats in the background planet. either that or go total black, it looks a bit like you are being hesitant with the colour. Control the darks and lights a bit more to make the figure stand out. It's hard to see whats happening with her legs and hips. don't make the forms to ambiguious. unless you really want to and are controling it. I could be mistaken into thinking that you are wanting to mask a lack of knowlage about the subject.

Errrr... I just turned up my contrast to try and see more of the details. her right arm is lookingh a bit funky. I'd like to have a go at fixing a few of the problems because I really like the idea behind it all. not so much an instructional fix up, but how I would have done it. This is a bit afronting but I like the idea of getting other people's ideas. I wish other people would do it more with my stuff

I like the image a lot but there are few problems that might drag it down a few rungs.

My crits are getting more and more harsh tell me when enough is enough.

[X-pLaGue]

Cleavage, where's her cleavage?!? Damnit!!
What?!? no underwear, metalic panties whatsoever?!?? Just a pathetic strip of cloth covering her p**sy ?!?
Look, doesn't it make her armour redundant?? even her most vulnerable part is unprotected..!

Anyway, I like her face, wicked. The planet in the background rox 2!!


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[Nex]

Looks very cool! Really like the comspsotion [edit] err.. composition [/edit] and stuff..

The Moon in the BG is a photo no?

Did you use any reference on the figure?


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[This message has been edited by Nex (edited August 07, 2000).]

[Joachim]

Looks very cool. I like the attitude of the girl a lot.

Comments, make her more sharp. It's a bit to muddy shading and shadows. Maybe she should be brighter in a way, exaggeration of moonlighting.
The background dont't fit, I think. Since the character is in focus, the background shouldn't really be sharper or more detailed than the character itself.

anatomical, it's hard to say much, since she's very bright and without too much details. But, I like that. Only the stumach area seem a bit wrong. The navel area is way to high up. And the hand holding the sword is svinging too much, like if it wasn't any bones or knockles inside.

But, like I said, I dig the character's pose and attitude, she looks really foxy. Looking forward to see the "final" adjustments

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[psi burn]

ok that face bears a STRIKINGLY similar look to the freakish woman in Fight Club...doesnt she??

i like the pic, but the armor could use some more...hmm.....depth, i guess?

[Silico]

Wow, that face has so much... so clear of an expression, and i don't know what she's telling me. it looks great, but then one major thing i would change, (i wouldn't know if it was that easy, i don't have photoshop or whatever) would be kinda sharpen it more, and yes, add a little depth in the colors like you mentioned before -- even for the white. sooo, in conclusion, super duper job!!! keep on a postin' friend!!

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[waylon]

Wow, thanks for all the comments everyone!

Rinaldo: I'd love to see someone else's take on this. If you want to play with it a little, be my guest. But on one condition: You show me the finished product.

X-Plague: Heh. I wanted to make her armor in a style that would be more effective against slashing weapons, with less concern about being stabbed. (Being a female, she'd want more manuverability too, and metal undies tend to chafe. Err... uhh... so I've heard. Yeah.)

As to the other questions/comments, the moon was rendered in 3DS Max and touched up in photoshop. (The texture for the moon was a heavily modified infrared image of the surface ov Venus, I think.) It was left over from another project, so I figured I'd use it. And yes, I was afraid that it would be too sharp in comparison to the foreground character, but I wanted to get other peoples' opinions first.

I'll play with adding more depth and definition to her figure and armor. And the background. And the color. And her shoulder plates. Man, what have I gotten myself into?!?!

[This message has been edited by waylon (edited August 07, 2000).]

[Anthony]

Her sword's too small, IMO.

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