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Member # Joined: 18 Jan 2009 Posts: 52 Location: Serbia, Belgrade city space port
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Posted: Wed May 27, 2009 8:56 am |
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Well, I did this as one of my illustration assignments.
I took one of the original Chris Brownes Hagar The Horrible pieces and tried to make it a bit more serious
Heres what's come out.
I kinda like it as it is my first comic board piece. Has some mistakes, but I don't mind at the moment.
Also don't mind the fact that i've left out some of the original text, as the text squares were meant for sentances on my langauge which are significantly shorter.
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Synnical member
Member # Joined: 28 May 2005 Posts: 177 Location: Toronto, Canada
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Posted: Thu May 28, 2009 5:02 am |
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I really like this, nicely done!
The panels are beautifully painted, though I feel some of them are a bit too dark to read, and I had trouble making out what was the last panel on the second row.
Some of the transitions could be better, like how you zoomed in on Hagar's face as the storm approaches, and you can probably make it more obvious by adding a blue tint to his face and perhaps his eye reflecting the lighting strikes in the distance. And although the last panel is gorgeous, I feel like it didn't quite belong to that line of thought you are trying to establish. Not sure how I would have done though. |
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Member # Joined: 18 Jan 2009 Posts: 52 Location: Serbia, Belgrade city space port
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Posted: Thu May 28, 2009 10:25 am |
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Hey Synnical, thanks for comments and critique
The last panel on the second row was actually his eye darkened. I guess I could have solved it better. I wish I've had more time to do these things instead of handing them over when they are assignment related. ;(
As far as zooming transitions and the transition between the "hagar-dissapears-away-in-stormy sea & last panel", I was as you can guess restricted to one-panel-story because of the original.
Also, you were right, I should've done the zooming panels more detailed but I just didnt have enough time
I think I might fix it up a bit and send it to a local comic con. |
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Matthew Is Godzilla member
Member # Joined: 12 Apr 2009 Posts: 187
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Posted: Fri May 29, 2009 7:33 am |
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ok here's my thought. Really like the interpretation but I feel the joke got lost. Perhaps yours was more to the serious interpretation but in the end it doesn't strike me as there was a mix up at all on behalf of that God. The mistake itself feels like he lost or died or whatever.
Not sure if it is only me but the end frames when zooming out like that makes me think that he drowned.
You understand what I mean? |
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Member # Joined: 18 Jan 2009 Posts: 52 Location: Serbia, Belgrade city space port
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Posted: Fri May 29, 2009 10:34 am |
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@Matthew is Godzilla
Yes my interpretation was supposed to be on the serious side. That was the idea of my assignement. I was supposed to take Hagar panel and transform it from a joke to something more dramatic.
Maybe I should have titled it "the death of Hagar the horrible" because he does disappear in the end and is presumed dead or missing.
I had to keep all the characters and follow the originial panels plot. |
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Matthew Is Godzilla member
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Posted: Fri May 29, 2009 12:27 pm |
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I should have read the op more, nevertheless good job there my man. |
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Member # Joined: 06 Aug 2008 Posts: 9
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Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 4:02 pm |
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good job here man i like it |
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Member # Joined: 18 Jan 2009 Posts: 52 Location: Serbia, Belgrade city space port
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Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 6:10 pm |
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thank you  |
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