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GordMacDonald member
Member # Joined: 25 Sep 2004 Posts: 197 Location: Canada
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Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2004 4:44 pm |
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This portrait was done in pencil, and modified in photoshop.
All crits welcome.
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GordMacDonald member
Member # Joined: 25 Sep 2004 Posts: 197 Location: Canada
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Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2004 2:49 am |
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This portrait is:
1) uninteresting
2) poorly drawn
3) same old, same old
4) all of the above
5) Excellent
cmon guys - brutalize me with your crits!
Gord MacDonald |
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The Real Mark member
Member # Joined: 13 Dec 2003 Posts: 322 Location: Brisbane Australia
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Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2004 5:58 am |
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it's good, but i've seen pictures of girls before haha
seriously, the drawing is great. |
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Drunken Monkey member
Member # Joined: 08 Feb 2000 Posts: 1016 Location: mothership
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Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2004 1:47 pm |
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face is excellent.. but the hair could use more refinement imho. |
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Odds member
Member # Joined: 17 Sep 2004 Posts: 374
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Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2004 2:22 pm |
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Yea, great drawing besides the un-refined hair. But, it's not a very interesting subject matter... I'd love to see you put those skills to something like an action drawing or something.  |
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bellas member
Member # Joined: 24 Aug 2003 Posts: 84 Location: spain
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Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2004 3:26 pm |
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beautiful!!!, i love the face and as you draw the lips, very beautyful. The hair is not important for me, for example danvinci only drew a few lines in portraits. So single the left eye seems a little big.
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GordMacDonald member
Member # Joined: 25 Sep 2004 Posts: 197 Location: Canada
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Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2004 7:32 pm |
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Thanks for the comments!
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The real mark: "i've seen pictures of girls before"
Odds: "But, it's not a very interesting subject matter"
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Yeah so true - I supose its easy for us to get jaded esp. with so much work out there. Ideally we come up with exceptionally original concepts expressed with exceptional means - thats "ideally". As far as original concept goes - a head and shoulders portrait is a no-brainer. What I have tried to do is create a strong expressive work within a well trodden gendre.
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Drunken Monkey: "but the hair could use more refinement "
Odds: "great drawing besides the un-refined hair"
bellas: "The hair is not important "
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I tend to agree with bellas on this one. I think if I were to put too much detail in the hair, it would diminish the strength in the face.
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bellas: yeah the eye is a little too big - that was noticed over at cgtalk as well
Thanks again for the input
Cheers
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Dan member
Member # Joined: 24 Sep 2000 Posts: 224 Location: Kingston, Ontario, Canada
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Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2004 9:54 pm |
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the hair kind of blends into the background a bit too much I think. I feel almost like her neck is really skinny because the hair covering it looks like it's behind her neck. But very nice _________________ It's sad how entire families can be torn apart by something as simple as a pack of rabid wild dogs |
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B3AND1P member
Member # Joined: 21 Nov 2001 Posts: 76 Location: San Jose, CA
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Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2004 4:07 am |
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To me the hair looks way too big in the back. It appears that her hair is is a HUGE triangle coming from he neck. Great face but really for me the hair is kind of distracting because it is so large yet so undetailed. _________________ Nude Character reference photos and Seamless Textures |
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pangu junior member
Member # Joined: 04 Dec 2004 Posts: 4 Location: Germany
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Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2004 10:58 am |
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great pencilwork, but a bit grey
you should try to colorize it, for example: Hue: 135, Saturation: 102 |
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Feral member
Member # Joined: 23 Jun 2004 Posts: 67 Location: Nottingham,UK
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Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2004 7:09 pm |
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Face is great, nice attention to detail.
For me the thing that lets it down is the background, too scribbled and (imo) to smudgy - (I dislike the smudge technique unless its done very well)
Maybe you could just fade the hair into a background tone on PS
Was a photo used or is the from a sitting? |
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GordMacDonald member
Member # Joined: 25 Sep 2004 Posts: 197 Location: Canada
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Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2004 10:17 pm |
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Hi - Thanks you all, for your time and comments!
Dan: "I feel almost like her neck is really skinny because the hair covering it looks like it's behind her neck."
I understand your observation - it is a bit of an issue
B3AND1P: "for me the hair is kind of distracting because it is so large yet so undetailed."
Hmm.. Lots of comments about the hair - good food for thought
pangu: "great pencilwork, but a bit grey"
I was going for "gentle", "subtle" ... But perhaps some accents could have been added - good point
Feral: "Was a photo used or is the from a sitting?"
Yes a photo was used, but the model was a client, I set up the lighting, did the photo shoot, let the client select from the 36 images shot (1 roll of film), enlarged the image from the contact sheet, and then did the portrait. |
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