[AndyT]

This was a DSG topic
"DSG 280: Robot: An Emergency Robot that is built to walk along the top of buildings "

Moved away from the Original:


New WIP version:

I'll add texture in the foreground and probably suggest a skyline in the background.
And I have to work on the shapes of the legs.
Any C&C so far?
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[Wagner]

I think the new one is alot better, but i like what it was doing before better. carrying injured people dosen't seem like a safe idea for a legged robot that moves on the rooftops, I think it would bounce around too much and the people inside would get hurt , heh. The vehicle dosen't give good visibility either. stairs like that probably wouldn't be too good for an ambulance either.

I like the shadows on the buildings, and the coloring, it's like a summertime evening . The situation dosen't look very urgent though, but it dosen't seem like you want it to be

[AndyT]

Quick and dirty job.

Is that a better direction?
I know composition and designs suck ... just want to show what elements I could add ...
green light for tension. To make the situation look more urgent.
And a flying vehicle to carry the injured guy(s).

Would that be better?



This in another possibility. I like what's going on in the area of interest more there.
And I think I fixed the legs!?
The both new vehicles are only placeholders


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[Max]

The last pic has the best composition I think. You should add some high buildings in the BG. maybe paint the sky in a different color...blueish
Nice image overall!!

[AndyT]

Trying to read between the lines.
Not many comments. Almost no positive comments.
Guess there's no real potential in the image.
I'll have to rethink the whole thing completely I guess.
Maybe it is because it looks cartoonish rather than painterly.

Personally I liked the colors. Blue sky? ... I tried it!
That can't be what you meant though. What am I doing wrong there?



Not sure what to think about that direction. You tell me?!

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[AndyT]

I'm rendering the latest version now.
Any comments so far?


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[Max]

Nice job Andy. The last version is really good.
The main composition is finished I think. So,...It lacks of detail.
You could add some windows, bricks,..I dunno whatever.
Maybe some reflections,..but, that's kinda tricky I think.
The colors of the blue one are much better I think,..there's more life in it.
But that's just taste. It's your choice of course. If you don't have any new ideas just start a new pic...it's all about practising

[AndyT]

Yeah I think it is the kind of practice I need.
Finishing something. Adding details.

Is this finished now?


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[Max]

omg, YES
Awesome Andy!!! The improvement is incredible.
You handled the colors and values brilliant. The comp is even better now.
Love the constrast here which lacks in some of your other images.
This one has a great "impact" - call it finished. Very well done.
Can't await to see what comes next

[IDrawGirls]

Thanks Max. I started a thread in the "Gallery"

At gfxartist this image got a 10 out of 20 or more (don't get the system there) rating.
And not many people want to comment on other boards. Guess it needs some more attention.

Next on my redo list is: 500 list: "Girls - Sleepover". Never did anything serious there.
Just something to be allowed to go on to the next topic.
Thanks again.
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[Drew]

AndyT, I can certainly tell you put more effort into this image. I think finishing more pics like this would help you out a lot. In your first couple of WIPs, the colors were, to be blunt, boring. They were stale, unsaturated, and just not pleasing to the eye at all. Your last one, though, is a huge improvement! You went with blue, yellow, and red, which are primary colors and all play off of each other nicely. You are aware that they look nice because they're a triad, right?

Also, you''ve really worked out the shapes and made them into 3d forms. This is great! The second image you posted (the mostly red one) had many lines that were kind of wobbley, and you ellipsis weren't convincing. The last on, however, looks much more confident and the forms seem really solid.

The somewhat unsaturated colors seem to suggest that this is happening at night. Is that the case? If not, you need more saturation. But overall, the last one is 100 times better than the first. I'm not exaggerating at all. I wouldn't even bother posting things like the first one if I could do things like the last one. Excellent work!

[IDrawGirls]

Thanks for the encouraging words.
I know I shouldn't post any quick, dirty concepts and ask about the general direction
But that's exactly what I do in this post again.

I guess because the first reactions don't seem to be that positive I have to rethink everything.

Would that direction be better? More painterly and less cartoony?
Maybe I overdid the lighting thing a little ...


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[Drew]

I think it's too early for you to be worrying about style. Do linework, do painterly stuff, do everything. Take what you can from every style and technique. The paths that other artists have taken will not always be the path that you take. That's ok! Learn as much as you can and start worrying about style when you feel like you've really nailed the basics.

Having said that, I don't think your latest overpaint was an improvement. But, if you feel some parts of it are more successful then take those elements and use them later on. Keep it up.