[Dr. Bang]

HI!

This starts out with the first picture, then it moves on into a horrible sequential. C&C are very welcome!!!! I hope you'll like it and understand what i'm trying to illustrate.












Btw check out this cool website www.att.com
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[Sukhoi]

Haha, great Bang!!

A couple of issues with anatomy, mainly arms. But I like it a lot, haha.
The red world seems interesting, and of course we'd all like to see the shooter girl walking some more. that certainly looks good (seems to be a Mr.T inspired girl, or am I wrong?)

Sukhoi

[oDD]

wow , very cool, i like the idea very much

i don't know much about storyboards but if i can suggest something

1. switch places of the pics nr2 and nr3. And in the new nr2 make the dude not shooting but only looking at them, plus make him more dark and put more accent on the guys fighting in the front. And then on the new nr3 instead of aiming make him shoot.

2. on the pic where he looks back (before the pics of his past appear) there should be a blast/strong light source of the firing gun from the left, if its already there ican't see it make it yellow or something

[edit]3. the baby looks pretty old on the face for me[/edit]
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[Tinusch]

Wow, when did you get so goddamn good? I love this. The first and last ones especially. I really love the motion in the 6th one, too. Awesome job.

[Francis]

I like this a lot. My personal preference would be to see more of the "life" part - I think that's what gives us the sense of who the person is. There are a lot of panels devoted to the action stuff, but it is not as informative about the character. I think you only need a couple of those panels to set up the fact that he is about to die - if we know a little more about him as a person, we feel more strongly about the death. Just my opinion of course.

Very nice work, good story telling!
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[william willette]

you rock
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[Binke]

this is excellent mr . Bang! There's a few anatomic issues, but i really really like the idea.

[yorric::]

I'd have to say my favorite thing about these is the environment in the action frames. The simplicity/solidity of the city is really neat and the colors really make the action seem somewhat panicked. Nice.
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[nexusnet]

good sequence
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[Drunken Monkey]

Well damn Bang! These are very good. I immidiately got that he is seeing his life go before his eyes right as he dies. Good storytelling.

On the frame where the girl is walking in behind the solider, it might be more appropritate for her to be in a sneaking pose...

The first frame got some great action in it!
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[eyalyab]

wow. this is really good.
nice "life-flashback"

[FONGOOL]

Very nice work! I especially like the closeup of the guy's eye!


So... what exactly is so cool about AT&T's corporate website??

[aColdOldKodiak]

cool work bang I like setup, and the idea is well exectued imo.
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[Spooky]

You know, here's this guy, just doing his job, defending his country, whatever, and along comes a woman and takes all away from him, albeit in a completely different way. Watch out for them latex-wearing, gun-toting sirens. Good stuff. As storyboards, having them all the same size though would help make the images more presentable. But good storytelling.
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[Dr. Bang]

Thanks so much for the response people! I love you all so much!

Sukhoi: Glad you like it! You're right, i SUCK at anatomy, its a shame that thousand hours of watchin porno, gigs of pornography content doesnt help me much in the anatomy department. Loomis is good, but have only few hot chix so i quit, but i guess i have to get used to it and learn. The girl came from my head, as you can see from the past, all of my girl style looks like this cause they're easier to draw for me. I've only see two girls from mr.t, he doesnt draw enough girl, he should draw more girls, can you hear me mr.t, draw more fucking girls god damn it.

Odd: Thank you! 1. Your idea is my original intention, just look at the number of the images. It sequenced just like the way you said! Your idea is cool too, i wish i've heard about it ealier. 2. That red do is supposed to be the shine for the laser not the flash of the gun. Thats what that picture is supposed tobe 3. Yeah youre right hehe, i cant draw baby for crap! I hate babies!

Francis: I'm glad you like it Francis. Thats what i'm going to do if i have more time, but i got tired after the last picture and i decided to move on. I agree with you, the starting picture kinda killed away all the emotion through the end of the scene.

Binke: Thanks! I suck at anatomy and i'll watch more pron.

Yorric: THose are my favorite too. Small things like this is what most inspired me to do a series of picture. Strange huh.

Nexus: Thanks!

Dr. Monkey: WOw,! Dr. Monkey liked mine! Weee! You're correct about what youre see. I'm so glad that you understand whats going on right away. For the girl part, youre right but i'm a perv and i want some cheesy hot ass scene so i made it like that Glad u like the first frame too, the action is some what inspired by all those scenes you see in Band of Brothers and Saving Private Ryan, where everthings up close, dirty and lots of physics.

Eyalyab: Thanks so much! Life-flashback it is!

Fongool: Thank you! I worked hard on his eye JUST FOR YOU!

Kodiak: Thank you! Its good to heard that they're executed, i thought it wasnt clear enough but i was wrong.

Spooky: DUDE! Thats my EXACT idea of the guy's background history. And the whole thing is done during the valentine day. By these, you can guess whether i had a date or not. Thanks for the useful comment, i keep note of it and definitely apply them in my future projects
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[gezstar]

Very nice Bang! I wish more people would post sequential stuff. I know it takes longer to do, but it can be cool if the effort pays off.

Anyways - good storytelling man. I enjoy stories that can be told without words.