[Al Ian]

Did two of the three durring the same movie today. (Yes, I got alot done durring a movie I've seen 12 times!)

Al Ian Grandpa Warrior
Started out as a normal warrior, turned out he needed depends when I was done. Pretty cool I thought.
http://www.deviantart.com/view/1190323


Old Spotted Grandpa
I was doodling, and Gramps just kind of evolved. I happen to think the spots are very cool!
http://www.deviantart.com/view/1190332


Ice Skater
Drew this last night durring the Ice Skating thing on ABC. Turned out pretty well I think. Just wish I had enough room on the paper to finish her foot/skate.
http://www.deviantart.com/view/1190343


C&C is always wanted, be brutal. I know its tough with styalized art like mine, not sure whats "supposed" to be that way, and whats not. So just comments on style, and what you would like to see will not be taken with a grain of salt. I dont like salt, so pepper will do for now. (Kidding) Be brutal!
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[Zarathustra]

I'll give you that I've never seen a comic like this before, and that I'm not an expert in comics, either.

But what kind of characters are you trying to portray with these? What kind of spirit or personality? They all seem sort of awkward and unattractive to me and I don't get any strong vibes from them like I might with Superman, The Simpsons, Doonesbury or even The Tick (which has large, empty orbs for eyes kind of like you do.) I don't like the eyeshape or the hands, although I might be able to get used to the hands. The huge eye on the middle one being all pitch black is especially distracting. You also seem to be developing small details like spots, hair and small wrinkles that may add time and detail to your drawings without necessarily adding that much more thrust to their personality.

Perhaps you have something great going here, but maybe you could try other ideas for some of the features.

Disclaimer: This is only my opinion. Someone else might look at this and fall down in worship, so just take this as one vote by one guy.

[Inspector Lee]

Hey, I know someone else gave you this comment on another thread but it was really good advice. When all the lines in a piece of line art are the same thickness (line weight) it's less visually interesting. If you look at black & white line art that you really think is great, I can almost guarantee you there will be a wide variation in the thickness of the lines. (especially when it's a piece of art that has minimal crosshatching or interior line work)When the line work goes from fat and bold to thin and delicate it has much more energy and visual interest. Something to consider anyway.
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[Al Ian]

Zarathustra - I agree with you on many fronts. AndyT gave me some great advice on how to address the eyes. Which I will give a shot shortly. I also agree when it comes to personality, I havent come accross one that realy fits with me yet. So I keep drawing and drawing until something catches me eyes!

Inspector Lee - Yeah, I know what you mean on the line weight. I drew these before I read that advice. Now the next step is to learn how to do/add line weight appropriatly. It's something I experimented with a few months ago, and failed misserably. Right now I'm looking at alot of examples of line weight. Maybe I'll figure this thing out If you have any tips on that, please send em my way!!
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[Inspector Lee]

I think any method you use to decide which lines to make thicker and which thinner is fine. One way to work, is to decide on a light source and direction (even though you won't see the light in a line drawing) and then draw the lines according to that. For example the lines on the side of something (say an arm or a face) that is nearer the light are thinner and those on the side that's farther away from the light (or on the underside of something that would block the light like a nose or a chin) are thicker. That's just one method, but it's a good place to start.
Also it's a good idea to use line weight to give importance to things (it makes your drawing clearer to the viewer as well). The outside line of an object or figure would be heavier, and interior lines (for hair, wrinkles, textures, fingernails etc.) would be thinner. Also something closer to the viewer would get an even heavier outline than something further back. I hope this is a little help, and not too confusing. I'd draw you a few samples, but I'm working on a huge mural project right now and I barely have time to answer my email. Keep drawing.
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[Al Ian]

Inspector Lee - You're a rock star!! Thats exactly what I was looking for. I'll take a run with what you've given me so far (once I'm done with my current project) and see how I do
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