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xmmx · Posted: Wed Jan 08, 2003 8:03 pm

so tell me if you have any suggestions.. i can take a harsh crit, i am here to learn Very Happy

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DL-44 · junior member Member # Joined: 21 Dec 2002 Posts: 26

Well, several things strike me right away.

The first is that there is absolutely no contrast, no focus whatsoever. It *needs* a focus. It needs highlights, it needs shadows.

The second, once my eyes make their way through it all, is that there is a complete lack of composition. It begs for balance.

The third is anatomy of the figure. I would highly recommend using some sort of reference to make him more realistic. As it is now, it is vastly disproportionate, and just....off.

So, to sum up -

Contrast
Focus
Balance
Anatomy

=)

xmmx · Posted: Wed Jan 08, 2003 10:12 pm

ohh hey thanks thats just what i needed been staring at this to long to notice anything Very Happy

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Awetopsy · Posted: Fri Jan 10, 2003 8:33 am

my question is why is the character holding the axe above his head.. i mean, there is no one around to see him, is he stretching? benchpressing his axe? he's facing away from the viewer which indicates he's unaware of the viewers presence so it really doenst make sense that he would be doing this victory pose so far away from the buildings in the distance with no one around.

I would personally have him in a more relaxed pose with the axe at his size.. looking intently at eh city..

anyways thats my two cents.

Al Ian · Posted: Fri Jan 10, 2003 10:41 am

On the flip side, I happen to like the stone pillars. Look very good, I also like the city in the background. A simple short term fix would be to play with the contrast settings in your art program. Kicking that up a notch would help this good work out a ton!
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xmmx · Posted: Fri Jan 10, 2003 11:17 am

Autopsy; actually the main reason for his pose is that I had planed the city to look as though it had been ransacked and burned (ok so it doesn�t look that way but hey just one more thing that need�s fixing), that city being his city. He is making a declaration to the god(s) to strike down upon those who did this. Ok so that is really hard to read in this image, I probably should have had him at lest looking up at the sky or at the city Embarassed

Al Ian; hey thanks I might just do that.. And if it look�s better I will post it up
thanks for the comments
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xmmx · Posted: Fri Jan 10, 2003 3:14 pm

Al Ian i took your advise and did a few adjustments. anyway i think it helped out a a lot Very Happy

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Awetopsy · Posted: Fri Jan 10, 2003 3:31 pm

I played with it a bit to balance it out a bit.. I think this makes the image more solid... or at least something like this..

Matthew · Posted: Fri Jan 10, 2003 3:38 pm

Hey Mrx, It�s me Lensflares. Smile

Your detail rocks.

Matthew

xmmx · Posted: Fri Jan 10, 2003 3:47 pm

hey awetopsy i really like how you have that set up. it's a lot easer to see the Relationship between him and the city, thanks for the paintover
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william willette · member Member # Joined: 15 Aug 2002 Posts: 119

now your just saying things for fun Rolling Eyes

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