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Fontainne · Guest Member #

Hey again. Here is the start of my next project. The story is as follows; This pilot was sent on a mission to take out some colonies of creatures up in the mountains. Well, he was stupid and misjudged the intelligence of these creatures, so they destroyed his ship and he barely made it out using the escape pod. So now he's stranded in a very cold, unfamiliar and dangerous place, with very little in supplies. This is for a project at work. crits very welcome, wanted it finalized before I go to paint. (The environment hasn't been fleshout yet, but will be over the next few hours/days, and within the next week you'll see the finalized project)

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MysticMan · Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2001 1:48 am

I don't think a downed pilot would stay with his crashed vehicle or escape pod unless rescue was iminent. You may want to put the vehicle off in the distance with the pilot sitting under a tree or a makeshift "hut" made from scavenged debris in the foreground.

Fontainne · Guest Member #

The company he works for would never waste their equipment or time to rescue him, thus the reason he is staying. because there is no chance of him being rescued. He's stuck up into some of the highest points of the Ande's and couldn't navigate his way down even if he had the equipment, So he's sitting waiting for his fate.

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bigtex · junior member Member # Joined: 09 Mar 2001 Posts: 35

fonts a big smelly guy

just kiddin

Fontainne · Guest Member #

Thanks Tex! great crit! bean-head!

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bigtex · junior member Member # Joined: 09 Mar 2001 Posts: 35

why is the paper yellow? DID YA PEE ON IT?

hehehehjeheheheh
maybe i should go to bed, its past my bed time

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Unit · Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2001 10:30 am

Cool, I love the story you got there, maybe if he knows he's gonna die, he'd have his food and his gun laid out in front of him, sort of choosing which one to use, he looks pretty freaked that he's stuck there.

The propeller blades look unevenly distributed.

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Ragnarok · Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2001 1:14 pm

I like the idea a lot, and how it is going on

But, I have a few crits:
-We can see four different parts of the escape pod, but if they were evenly distributed there should be five. But that won't fit with what I think you wanted

-The "rotator"(sp?) of the blades isn't placed in the middle of the pods.
-His right foot seems to be below his hand, but then we should be able of seeing it
-His left foot seems a bit strange, maybe
it's me

Suggestions:
-His has very few hair and looks quite old, around fifty, but if he is a pilot send in a special mission, I think he should be a bit younger

-His hair is quite strange, but maybe that's the way you want it. Personally I will follow the basic scheme over the whole head.

After some crits, I would like to say I love the way you have made the cloth and the structure of the pod

And, btw, the little drawing at the right is the same one but without the pod, isn't it?
I hope all this helps

-Ragnarok

Fontainne · Guest Member #

Ragnarok: Despite the incongruities of the pods overall shape, I think it is conveyed well, so I may not touch it (fix the perpective and layout).
-The prop is as you pointed out offcenter, this I will fix, I must fix!
-His right foot is baried in the snow, thus the reason you can't see it, (remeber he is in high points of the Ande's mountains, lots of snow up there)
-I like his left foot, but if others agree with you I will rework it.
-The corporation he works for was essentially forcing him into retirment, and, to keep from having to pay him his hard earned retirment money, they send him off to get killed. A wonderfully easy way to save a few bits of money.
-The hair style was intentional. He's an old guy who's still trying to be hip and instyle, but he's still wearing his hairdo from half a century ago.

Thank you so much for the comments, they've helped immensly (and yes the drawing at the right is the same, (but will be painted over by this evening with environment)

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surferboi · Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2001 2:33 pm

well few things.. i think the size of the escape pod is too small in relation to him.
looks more like a midget helicopter or something.

BakaSan · Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2001 6:59 pm

this is cool. i like the look of despair on his face and the ragedness of the props.
hmmm.... i think my crits have already been stated, but ill say them anyways.
the props are not evenly distibuted, but that could be a stylistic choice, because they are still symetrical.
his left food looks wierd.
under his right arm: is that a bundle or his leg, at first i thought it was like a pack, but now im not sure.
there. i made comments like you asked me to. happy now?

Fontainne · Guest Member #

Thanks. Okay thats two for the foot. hmm. maybe I'll have to do something about that.

hmm. now its time to start changing and drawing some more (yes its a pack holding up his left arm.)

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Fontainne · Guest Member #

Unit: I was thinking the gun and the food (and a little bunson burner) already, you've just reaffirmed the neccesities of it, I'm also putting in the background today, so come back and check it out later this evening. The blades, the blades, thanks for the observation, I will be adding a 3 set of blades to balance out the props.

BigTex: Yeah go to sleep tex, go play some tribes, (hey aren't you grounded still)

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Shaded · Posted: Sat Mar 10, 2001 12:34 am

Actually, I quite enjoy the image. Were you to add the rest of the background in [however minimally], and build more of the stranded ambience, it would complete the recipe.

Keep it right up mate.

Ragnarok · Posted: Sat Mar 10, 2001 2:38 am

I supposed the foot was in the snow, but if you have your foot buried in the snow up to the toe, it will ache a lot in the position he is laying, but his face doesn't show pain, but sadness.

Oh, and the story is getting better and better

Fontainne · Guest Member #

He's really at a point right now where he doesn't care too much about himself, because he knows he's not got much more on his petty life. So a little bit of pain and coldness isn't going to affect him too much.
Ah by the way, just started blocking in the colors. should have something nice and rough tonight.

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