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Author   Topic : "[crit] Mason Verger"
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 29, 2000 6:10 am     Reply with quote
"THE CHAMBER where Mason spends his life is quiet, but it has its own soft pulse, the hiss and sigh of the respirator that finds him breath. It is dark except for the glow of the big aquarium where an exotic eel turns and turns in an endless figure eight, its cast shadow moving like a ribbon over the room." ~ HANNIBAL Thomas Harris



Ok, I know this is pretty weak, but I tried. From making it, I learned that next time I have to pay far more attention to lighting, I have to practice heaps with the lighting. The tank is supposed to be the only light source, maybe I should have put more contrast, the right side of the face and body should have been darker?

Also, I now realise the perspective is very boring and flat. The angle should be more interesting. I think it needs more texture on everything too.

Anyway, I'd really appreciate your criticisms, as you see I really need them!!! It might also be interesting to see what some of you guys can come up with using the same concept.

P.S. Mason is supposed to be faceless, his face was torn off and he ate it himself. I couldn't create a scabby texture that had scars on it and such. Thanks.
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