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aNoah · Posted: Mon Oct 23, 2000 6:08 pm

Well, this is NOT my first painting.

OK... rain your criticism on me.

aNoah · Posted: Mon Oct 23, 2000 6:11 pm

OK, lemme touch that up a little bit

[This message has been edited by aNoah (edited October 23, 2000).]

Brue · Guest Member #

I think her hair and such is a bit too blurred. It has no texture. And she could use some pants : )

aNoah · Posted: Mon Oct 23, 2000 6:25 pm

Will work on the hair...
The pants... now that's a different story

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CapnPyro · Posted: Mon Oct 23, 2000 6:38 pm

Rargh! Airbrush bad! Ugh.

Keep everything as sharp as your signature and your in business.

aNoah · Posted: Mon Oct 23, 2000 6:52 pm

I didn't use an airbrush. This was done in Photoshop 5.5 using a regular brush tool. I did a lot of smudging in an attempt to make her look smooth. Any suggestions as to how make the image look sharp but still natural?

Tinusch · Posted: Mon Oct 23, 2000 6:56 pm

Keeo your edges sharp. The skin looks okay, but the edges are blurry (i.e. the bottom of her hand). Tighten them up with a hard-edged brush.

Brue · Guest Member #

she looks like she's smoking an imaginary cigirette.

make her mouth look a bit more natural..i think. I also think it is the only part of this pic that isnt blured.

Visigoth · Guest Member #

Yay! Jodi Ann Patterson!

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plant42 · Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2000 7:00 am

Neat!
The lips look a little small, maybe it's just the puckered expression. The eyebrows seem a tiny bit too low, and the left eye seems slanted or tilted just a tad.
The modeling of the suit and skin is really good, I don't think it's too blurry, if you want it sort of in soft focus that's fine. The hat is a little flat - it could use some of the shading the rest of the pic has.
Lastly, it seems like the picture could use some more dramatic lighting - it seems overly well-lit, like a staged photograph outside, maybe darken the darks and make some white highlights (or just play with the curves/levels in Photoshop).

Very cool stuff.

Anthony · Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2000 9:26 am

Yeah, definately needs to be sharpened. Her facial anatomy's a tad off too, and her ear looks like it's dead, but that's OK. Just make sure all your plains are on the same horizontal for the face.

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aNoah · Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2000 10:28 am

Thanks all for the helpfull criticism. I'm gonna try and make the changes you suggested?

MaLoRuM · Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2000 7:30 pm

great pic, i agree with the above comments. One thing i noticed is that her left breast (right side of the pic) seems a little too high, I know her torso is tilted some but if you draw a line from one breast to the other curved in the angle the torso is tilted in, they dont match up...

i recommend she does some Abdominal and Chest Workouts and Raise dem saggy boobs!! awesome pic.....reminds me of someone.... cant put my finger on who tho.. u use a photo reference or no?

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