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eyewoo
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 Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2004 6:11 am |
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The last two pages of the children's picture book, though I still have two more earlier page sets to do. Needed to do the last two before the earlier ones.
pages 28 and 29
page 30
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| Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2004 11:33 am |
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| i kind of wonder if a child would figure out the connection between the pages, it might not be clear at first that the mother already had his red socks and saved him the trouble. Just one second he needs the socks, next second he's wearing them. Nice style as always though, these last too are very visually clear. |
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bagelguillotine
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| Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2004 4:37 pm |
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You've really mastered the children's book style. This is a stupid crit, but the grammar is a little wrong on the first page. It should be
"WOW!...Thanks, Mom. Now I just have to find my favorite red socks!"
Just some commas.  |
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eyewoo
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| Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2004 6:15 pm |
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Simoom... these are the last three pages of a 30 page book. It should be clear what's going on if you see the first 27 pages... I'm going to put them up on-line in a few days... Just have 1 two page set to finish.
bagelguillotine... Thanks... I need that kind of help... 
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