Sijun Forums :: View topic - Crash ship salvage on snowy mountains. critique

Alan · Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2003 6:10 am

This was done pretty fast. Just messing about. No real attempt at reality here, this could be a different planet, different dimension. maybe even one where proportion and perspective do not apply. Wink

so. how much does it suck?

lots, i should think.

but please do comment and critique.

-Alan

Matthew · Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2003 6:42 am

Hey

Critique = Flying UFO seems like it is out-of place.

Comment = The rest of the picture rocks, good work on both rocks and crashed aero-plane.

My god I am a post- aholic. :)
see you
Matthew

Critical Pete · Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2003 10:31 pm

Hmm... This sucks about as much as a man-hating lesbian feminist. I like the way you did the top part. The sky especially is interesting. However I don't like the sloppy treatment of the lower half. I think it could be cropped and the picture would still look good, or your could work it a bit more...

Sukhoi · Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2003 11:55 pm

Good. It's seems like you haven't fully thought out the shadows though. The uppermost mountain is the only one casting a correct shadow it seems. On the rest of the tops the shadow is either too long or too short, making it hard to read. also it could with some more depth to communicate scale, as the plane, the mountains and the rescuer all seems to be on the same plane in space.

But mainly I'd say that you maybe need to wash some parts out in a little more gray/white.

But I totally see what you're doing and I really like the way the rescueship whios the snow around like cream. Cool.

Sukhoi

eyalyab · Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2003 12:25 am

the ship thats about to pick the wrecks is really out of place. the hightlights on it isnt like the lighting on the rest of the pic. + it doesnt look the same distance from us as the wreck, if that's what you intended.
why is there a diagonal line going through the sky?

Zu · Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2003 12:43 am

I totally agree with what have been said, and I think It's a great work , especially the upper mountain and the crashed plane; even the effect of the snow flowing on the edge of the mountain is nicely done ...
But i would stress two things : the rescue plane is definitely to change for the perspective is really strange. And maybe add more details to his "claws -arms" .
And the idea of Critical Pete to crop the image would maybe be worth a try ... it could bring more dramatic effect ....

But it's really nice work ... Wink

cryonic · Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2003 8:23 pm

Personally i really do feel that 'flying craft' is out of place... maybe it's because of the cloudy and windy scene effects are not enough. I think is the sense of dimension....

Smurf · Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2003 9:53 pm

the flying craft looks like it needs to be tilted so you see more of the top of it because of the perspective of the land....
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Alan · Posted: Wed Aug 13, 2003 4:57 am

Thanks for the comments everyone. All the points you bring up are good. I think what is most wrong is that the flying craft is very off.. what was i thinking?? Rolling Eyes

maybe it should be be pushed back more?

eyalyab: the thing going through the sky is my attempt to add a big mountains in the far distance..heh..