[Hase]

here�s a sketch for a pic I want to spend some time on over the next few days... I�m sort-of happy with the layout, but it doesn�t quite feel right yet... any suggestions you have would be welcome.

[mitch]

this is cool, i can tell you will paint it good. THe cropping is definately a good choice. The perspective relationship between the figure, his arms, and the gun is off(his right arm is too long). I wanna see it painted.

[Max]

I would crop it like THIS
- whith some transforms for the composition.

Looks good so far, now color it!

[Hase]

aahh.. thanks for the tips... I�m not quite sure how to fix that arm (if I move the character or the gun the gunner in the rear will get obscured).

Max, I�m not sure about cropping it that closely, it feels a bit constrained like that - I was thinking about taking not quite that much off the top, but removing about 10% from the right side (there�s nothing happening there anyway).

[Max]

Ups, I thought you would crop it like you have shown with the strokes you draw around the soldier...

So then I would't crop eighter....

Good luck

[Hase]

bit of a crosspost but the guy in the front is going to look something like this (I think I forgot to mention that this is going to be a b/w piece because I suck at color work) - he�s not quite right yet, but I�m gonna work on it:

[Godwin]

nice drawing, i say go with the version max did, make it focused and wide, give it a paranomic view, make the sun rise over the clouds, whatever (is that guy upfront on an aircraft similar to those behind? or are they on the ground?)
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[Hase]

I think the composition needs some work yet, especially the foreground (I think). When I started with this it was a 30 second doodle done during a pathology class, now I think that I want to put a little more thought into it before I get going.
The guys in the foreground are on the top deck of a ship similar to the one in the background, the litte fighters around are not planes in the usual sense but aircraft supported by gas tanks a little like zeppelins...


here�s a try on the soldier in the front (i used the original sketch, the legs got pretty messed up but I think the arm is not so noticeable now):

[aphelionart]

prehaps have the guy tilted more upwards... his gun going at almost a 45 degree angle to the ground; that way it looks like he's firing at the planes, and also draws the eye more to the planes, or if u wanna crop the image to just the guy, itll signify planes in the air. just the first thing that popped out at me
-matt

[Godwin]

on the composition, i suddenly got an image in my head of a similar soldier in the foreground, just showing his face/helmet on the right side, i dunno if that fits the perspective, but it might look cool
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[Hase]

exam time, so I haven�t gotten much (anything) done...

aphelionart: I�ll try that.

godwin: you mean like this?
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[merlyns]

nifty! I like the gray tones

-david
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[CwStone]

yea i like the soldier in foreground, except i think it may look better if he was looking toward the battlescene a bit more. It looks a little wierd with him jus lookin out into nothin as there is a battle right behind im.
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[Hase]

[Hase]

still playing around getting nowhere - this is what the gunner guy might look like underneath:



what do you think?

[Hase]

some ships that might be in there somewhere:

[Hunago]

Nice, I really like the overall composition, and the parts you have done looks great so far. Look forward to see this done.

[CwStone]

i really like ur alian design there...maybe u could have a guy like that in the foreground?

ps, hurry up and finish this! im getting anxious to see the final
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