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mario36
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Just finished this page up. I was wondering if anyone had comments on storytelling for this piece. Some ppl said that I'm still lacking in that area. Thanks!
Oh, if you haven't seen the other sequentials, check this
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Matthew
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| Posted: Mon Jan 20, 2003 4:08 am |
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Hello
I think that the comic is getting better and better, I think the critiques earlier wanted even more bad language but I think the conversation between the characters here is super. 
hehe, I wonder what�s behind that door.?
And also, It�s only one episode left then, or?
have a nice day
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aColdOldKodiak
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| Posted: Mon Jan 20, 2003 11:34 am |
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This is cool. I saw the other pages and the work is coming through. One thing I noticed is in the 3rd panel everyone has the same expression, it rather odd. Also some of the poses look a little stiff. But I really like the clean line work here.
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AndyT
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| Posted: Mon Jan 20, 2003 11:47 am |
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Hehe. I just noticed the different length of the table legs. But I enjoyed looking at that page.
Especially the perspective in the last panel. The gun looks strange somehow.
Makes me want to read on...
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mario36
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| Posted: Mon Jan 20, 2003 2:46 pm |
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cool. thanks a lot for the comment.s Actually, Matt, I think I'm just gonna keep making these sequentials until this scene is finished. It might be 10 or 12 altogether. After that, i'll pay more attention to conceptual design pieces to push this idea further.
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