[jeffery]

Earlier today I posted the in-progress version of this at another board, but I've put in a few more hours, and due to time constraints, I think I'm gonna have to call this finished. I painted it as the front of a promotional postcard I'm going to send out to clients.

I had a really hard time with this, working on version after version before things finally began to click. It almost drove me insane.

[dARCKLOWN]

just 1 thing , those 2 orangey plants in the bottom left cornor look very bright and stick out way to much from the nice calm colours of everything else well thats my say apart from that i like it alot

[ November 03, 2001: Message edited by: dARCKLOWN ]

[Malachi Maloney]

I like it a lot. The only "problem" I really see is that the guy looks a little stiff. I think it might be the positioning of his right arm.
On a up note, I think the lighting is great.

Take it easy,
MDM

[Shaded]

This thread surely deserves more than 3 replies! You have done a commendable job with the colors, but (and this may just be me), the diver himself dosent look quite like he's underwater - perhaps the tones on him need to take on a slightly more bluish hue. That, and the finger-thumb thing on his left arm looks odd.

Bottom line, however, is that its a great composition. Well done

[dr . bang]

jeff deserve a bump!

Awesome job on the lighting , I loooooooove this piece


a critique though , see the tenacles ? its color is too stong, perhaps you can add a few big blob of dark orange on it to make it less stand out.

Otherwise, great job Jeff!

[Robert Ashley]

Looks great!

The only problem that I see is that his right arm is way too short and his left hand is way to big.

Other than that, I love the picture....the water above him looks great. It would be nice to see some caustic light reflections on the sea bed though.

Very good job!

[horstenpeter]

I already saw this at lumental, I liked it a lot, both the piece and the idead behind it. Have to agree on that comment about the orange plants though. I also think the diver looks too flat and could use some more detailing.

[jeffery]

thanks for the comments. the difficult thing about drawing sea anenome is that they have their own luminescence.. they're a difficult thing to paint, but i think even if they're too bright, they add to the 'reef'ness of the scene.

you're right about the diver's right arm, i never really noticed it before. shame on me.

his other hand is kind of big, but i did that on purpose. when this goes to print, everything (hopefully the mistakes) are going to be smaller, so I emphasized the size of the hand in order to get my message across. a bit of artistic license i guess.

[DiXter]

wow, the lightning and colours on this really amazes me..

the only thing for crit is the mans right arm.. I guess it's supposed to look like he's moving it to swim with and that it's almost pointing in the direction of the viewer. But something makes it look like it's to short. If you're going to change anything I think it's that little detail.. Everything else is great!!

[DiXter]

oh.. I'm to slow.

[Davem]

I so love the colours and lighting in this piece, excellent stuff.

I'm not sure if this is a good idea or not but but i was thinking that adding some impression off movement from the left flipper might be a good idea. I have no idea how you might do it but i get the feeling that a small amount of eddying(??) vortex kind of swirls coming off it would make it look like hes just kicking that flipper out to move to the surface. could possibly be done with bubbles. But if he's meant to look stationary like hes floating peacefully then disregard.

I saw this "Monet and Japan" exhibition recently where one of the consistant water themes (especially in the japanese prints) was to show the impression of the feel of the water through swirling lines.

Maybe also a school of tiny fish moving through the dead area at the bottome left. Using their flocking pathway you could give the impression of slight movement and current in the water.