[exo13]

Hey everybody

I was fishing through a zipdisk full of old files and found this image. Honestly, I had a lot of fun doing it. It was my first landscape piece with painter and I since I was relatively inexperienced, I was so glad it came out so well. I've cleaned it up a bit and smoothed out the blotchiness of the sky somewhat, plus I added a little fremen sandrider.

Anyway don't be shy. I'd really appreciate any comments, crits , ideas or suggestions you have. I know that plenty of the artists here are better than me and must have some helpful tips on how I can make it more presentable.

Thanks
-N. D. hill

[Fyllo Theos]

Hey man that is really cool. I think there isn't a thing wrong with the landscape. But to imporve it, maybe you should make the sandworm affect the sand more as it comes up, and maybe put a thumper next to the freman. DUNE ROCKs!!!!

[Capt.FlushGarden]

Hey, looking good pal!

Uhm I did a repaint, hope you don't mind, but I just want to give you some tips =)

First of all, I have to pardon the bigbrush strokes...I made the repaint really fast.

Your're at the beach, waching the sunset, and then you look behind your back, what do you se? I believe that the sky behind you would have a more pink, purple or blue color. that's why I added the blue light coming from behind. Your sun is almoust white, and the sky around it goes directly from read to white, I removed the white and replaced it with bright yellow instead, what do you think? I also painted the mountains in the background dark-red or brown. I've learned that you're supposed to stay away from 100% black, I also added mountains behind to give the pic more deapth...
Well I hope you accept this repaint, it's my very first =) I'm kinda shy hehe

[exo13]

Thanks,

I was actually thinking of putting a thumper in the upheaval of sand, like the worm was specifically targeting it. But I though that maybe most of you wouldn't get it. Now that you mention it though, maybe I will put one right next to the fremen.

I was also thinking about adding a very distant guild highliner that maybe you'd see next to the sun, but I thought that that may detract from the barrenness of the landscape.

I guess my main worry about the image, is the stone wall that rises up in the back. It looks too carved and smooth. Maybe I should add more grain or even a really subtle pencil sketch over the lines.

also, as Fyllo pointed out, the sand upheaval is too small and localized. You may have noticed that I even put a little water-ring type thing. I'm thinking that maybe I'll smuge the sand up next to it so it'd look like pillers or streaks of sand being thrown up.

anyway, Fyllo's right. Dune does rock. Go read it. I'm just finishing up Chapterhouse right now.

[exo13]

I don't mind the repaint at all. It looks pretty good actually. You're right about the sun, I should change that and maybe have more of a variation in color in the sky. I don't think I'll add clouds though, since arrakis is supposed to be very dry.

Your pic helped me notice something else too, I have almost no shadow being cast from the dunes. I'll have to work on that and maybe even make them more angular.

Thanks for the help and for future reference to anyone else, feel free to illustrate your point.

[edible snowman]

maybe you should do it like some of the matte paintings in the scifi movie, and have the foreground have completely opposite lighting of the background. unless thats not how you're supposed to do it.

[c2design]

Nice composition- I like the little fremen guy. The piece as a whole could be improved if you added more texture. Right now the piece it a bit mushy, but if you try adding a mouth and some greyish purple shadows, it would look even better.

[Vgta]

hmm maybe if the sand worm would have it's mouth open???

[exo13]

I could still use some crits if anyone's interested.