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Alan
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PostPosted: Sun May 06, 2001 7:39 pm     Reply with quote
Hi all!

This was a fast pic, just to experiment with a dynamic pose. I noticed too late some errors and it also came out pretty stiff... any comments? One problem I seem to have is that i just don't see the mistakes until too late...



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Mharett
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PostPosted: Sun May 06, 2001 7:59 pm     Reply with quote
one thing that may help you out with dynamic figures, is try to keep them looking graceful, and smooth. get in front of a mirror and perform the action you want before you draw. he seems stiff because all his joints look rigid, it almost looks like hes trying to balance on that one foot, imho.
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Matt Elder
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PostPosted: Mon May 07, 2001 6:14 am     Reply with quote
The piccy is pretty cool and shows a lot of promise. A couple of key things thought:

1) Anotomy: the way the pec's overlay the chest doesn't look right, they seem a little small in comparsion to the area above the ribs

2) Proportion - the size of the head to the arms to the body to the legs just doesn't seem consistent.

3) Pose - there appears to be a couple of "painful" elements. The characters left foot seems to be twisted too far around when compared with the knee. The spacing in between the left hand 2nd and 3rd finger (while quite pausible), doesn't seem natural. Try exaggerating the actual pose a little. The background doesn't provide a clear picture of what the character has just leap off or about to land onto.

At the moment the character seems to be making a small hop and the facial expression appears a little weird. The smile just seems out of place, it isn't a sinister one or a grimance "I'm about to rip your head off cause I can".

I know I've been a little harsh with the comments but you do have an interesting style that just needs a little work
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BlackPool
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PostPosted: Mon May 07, 2001 10:43 am     Reply with quote
You should think of anatomy as an element of design just like anything else in your composition. Don't try to put EVERYTHING in there and try to stay away from mirroring the left and right side.

As far as the rest, well..keep it up, your doing great!
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Alan
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PostPosted: Mon May 07, 2001 6:01 pm     Reply with quote
Thanks for the feedback! I think they are all valid critiques and I will try and work on what was said.

As for practicing in a mirror, i think it is a good idea but i don't have access to any thing like that... small bathroom, tiny mirror

-Alan
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Collosimo
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PostPosted: Tue May 08, 2001 1:10 am     Reply with quote
Blackpool said: "Don't try to put EVERYTHING in there..."

Spot on Blackpool...

Thats what I am thinking of too, you have tried to include lots of detail into the anatomy and kind of overlooked the overall proportion and communictaion of form that can be achieved with less.. a simple shape, do some sketching, life drawing and make quick gesture drawings that focus on generalised shapes, the big shapes, no detail at first, then work it in at the end.
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