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Metz · Posted: Mon Feb 26, 2001 1:41 pm

scanned in to pictures i made at school..
an abstract painting done with acryl and my first self-portrait actually :) not too many hours in these two..

crit would be app

also, please check out my site :) http://metz.xrs.net/

~Metz

Metz · Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2001 12:37 am

did i mention that crit would be nice ?

- http://metz.xrs.net

mantis · Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2001 2:57 am

It's hard getting crit around here, well for the sucky people like myself, atleast. I like the second pic, it should have more contrast though. The first pic, I don't understand, the red-stuff is that a kanji? If so, what does it mean?

Loki · Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2001 3:40 am

Hey hey, mantis. For what it's worth, here are my $0.02 :

first pic: cool idea ... not really sure where you want to go with the finish ... yeah, I know it's acryl, but now it's scanned, isn't it?

The 'plague' looks kinda metallic to me, maybe you want to follow that path? And the red thingy screeeeeams for a nice shadow under it ... but on the other hand, it's an abstract image, so I can probably go f*** myself with my comments

second: not bad ! do lots more (5000+ ... I'm at number 32)

Love,

Loki

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Metz · Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2001 10:15 am

forgot to say that the first one got abit screwed when i scanned it, it's abit different in colors actually. its abstracted from some seashell sketches.. atleast i got it abstracted

i agree that the second one is abit 'gray' it's also abit better irl.. but still

thanks

~Metz
http://metz.xrs.net

Metz · Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2001 12:56 am

that might have looked cool.
true that the text is kinda bad... i often get sick of paintings and hurry up to finish them

hehe, not canadian but norwegian.. damn its cold here today.

all your snowboards are belong to us

~Metz
http://metz.xrs.net

TickleMeElmo · junior member Member # Joined: 27 Feb 2001 Posts: 2

Not sure precisely what's going on there, but the spacing of the text on the rim looks like it was kinda squeezed at the end.

I think it would be effective to space the phrases out evenly, then add the red bits on top, as if they've invaded after the fact. The tendrils could then overlap parts of the words, but not so much as to make it unreadable.

The portrait is nice. Are you Canadian?

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