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lostpapers · Guest Member #

Hi,

this is a work in progress version of a drawing on the theme of the rogue woman. Any advice comment or critic is welcome.

It is to note that the black & white version is available for people who would like to give a try in colorizing it in a different way

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- Ben
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Holly Jolly · Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2001 4:40 pm

What!? How can that not be final? You guys confuse me, it looks great to me.

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SoMK · Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2001 5:21 pm

I really like the shadow on her left arm and on the leather of her "shirt" "brace" dunno the word... :/ oops

I have a small grudge against the hair but that's maybe just me... I still think the shadows are too strong. Maybe you could try and shadow the upper part under the hood and let the light play with the longest strands.... anyway, I like the way it's going :)

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roundeye · Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2001 7:55 pm

the buldge in her pants is too big. im serious.

[edit] did a quick sketch, might be way off but hey...

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Eric Pommer · Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2001 2:23 pm

Looks very neat. I have a few suggestions: I agree with the comments about the hair...not only that, but I think the hood is showing too much hair. I don't think the way it falls open on the left is natural.

I like the eyes and the brooch, especially. Is her right arm complete? Right now it looks awfully flat compared to the left.

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Mike · Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2001 5:17 pm

neato mosquito... i like it. especially the arm bracelet thing...

lostpapers · Guest Member #

So, to avoid mistakes I have to say that the first picture (in the opening post ) is what I would call now for my part a final version.

the one presented by roundeye ( with a smaller bulge ) is based on the precedent version, where the right arm was not finished ( this is where you are true Eric Pommer )

Concerning shadows and light, I would take any advice or demonstration to help me improve my style. I know my current style is using quite strong shadows and colors, and I don't succeed in softening them.

About this "wrong bulge" it was a choice : I wanted to give her a rounder belly and not a strict flat muscled belly. It seems that worked

Thanks everyone for your comments...

About the head and the hood falling, I agree completely with you guys. I found the shape of the hood great when I finished it, but I realized then that it was wrong with the head size. But it was too late to modify that at that time

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- Ben
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http://lostpapers.free.fr

lostpapers · Guest Member #

Thanks also for having noticed the brooch, this is a little detail I'm quite happy with

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- Ben
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http://lostpapers.free.fr

BlackPool · Posted: Fri Apr 13, 2001 6:37 pm

Here's my 2 cents. Artistically it's good. Technically, the only problem I have with it is her right hand. It needs to be forshortened more so that the knuckles are seen at the contoure line. Also the fabric I think should register more that it is being gripped. IOW, the change of it's direction at the hand should be more drastic.