[notic]

Im not really happy with either one of them.
and i suppose this isnt really finished work.
crits are more than welcome

[SynrrG]

I like them both alot. Im not a proffesional so feel free to take my comments with a grain of salt. BUT on the girl, she seems to be missing highlights in here eyes. Like reflections of light and what not.

When it comes to the sunset, GREAT use of colors. Truley. But the land looks like it needs a little something. The grass blades is on the right track. Not sure though, I kinda suck at scenary (and spelling) myself!

[Gothic Gerbil]

Absolute love the landscape! Has a very watercolour pencil feel to me. Interesting effect with the misty grass. As for the girl, she looks like she is on drugs and could use an ear or so. Nose looks good though. Looks a tad buck-toothed as well, I don't think the teeth would come out quite that bright. Eyes could use a bit of perspective but that is probably just one too many cups of coffee and perspective drawing class here ignore me tra la la!

[Steven Stahlberg]

The face is good, not much to crit about that.
About the sunset:
the composition: I suggest moving the horizon up or down, and the sun left or right. Or create some dramatic asymmetrical clouds or other features. Don't leave it all symmetrical as now.

The colors: they aren't quite proper sunset color, have a look at some images, or some real sunsets. Specifically the magenta, purple and black should not be there I think, not facing in this direction anyway. Also the ground is much darker in this kind of lighting situation.

The shapes: the clouds have no perspective, they should become bigger at the top of the image. Also not enough variety in the shapes. Again, look at some images of sunsets. The grass suffers from this too, the straws all look the same, evenly spaced, like an abstract pattern.

Hope that wasn't too direct, sorry if it was.

Steven

[notic]

your critique was great steven!
i'll try this tomorrow, so i will think clearer.

thanks!

[LordB]

The face is good but the lightning needs some work. Try to put a little more contrast on the face so you get a more plastic look.
I like the sunset the only thing id do with it is smudge it a little.

Have fun, die young.

[notic]

synrrg - woops, i forgot that shiny little spot in the eye, gonna fix that

gothic gerbil - glad you liked the watercolor feeling i was trying to achieve .
the girl isnt finished yet, i havent had time to work on it, but i will, the teeth looks kinda wierd when i look at it know.


booth good critiques(yes, i cant spell that word), thanks.

[Jabberwocky]

You said that the girl isn't finish so once you add a neck and ears she might look better to you. In the sunset you might want to add something like a dead tree closer to the front of the pic.

Other wise they look pretty cool.

[Dezi]

The sky in the sunset is very good, but I'd work on the horizon line, it seems the color is bleeding into the ground...and the girl? Great, but she looks kinda stark on the white background, Also neck and ears would help. and you know those two lines above her lips? Her "philtrum" as it's called, needs to be softened, maybe use a darker version of her own skin tone, rather than harsh grey lines. Or the blur tool. Oh and I like Jabberwockey's comment on the dead tree.

[ October 04, 2001: Message edited by: Dezi ]