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Member # Joined: 25 Mar 2000 Posts: 671 Location: Thousand Oaks, CA
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Posted: Sun Dec 17, 2000 3:27 am |
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Not sure what to add to this, or where to go with it. I'm still really bad with my tablet and color use in general. Any crits or tips are welcome.
The idea was to have a girl just grown in a tube walking out, i wanted to make her all slimy looking with matted hair and harsh lighting on her. Maybe have a broken tube in the background (which I didnt add) that she just broke out of. I'd also like to apologize in advance for the obviously wannabe craig mullinsish wall there, it's hard to make a flat wall interesting
Here's the original sketch I did on a slow night at work http://home1.gte.net/capnpyro/firsttimesketch.jpg
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Posted: Sun Dec 17, 2000 3:47 am |
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I think if you would complete some parts of the drawing like her hands, and feet, erase the lines on her body, and smooth out the walls some more, the drawing would look really good. You have a great idea going there. And if you were looking to illuminate her (with that green vile tube in the back), try to make it illuminate from behind her some more, that would really add some nice atmosphere to her drawing, and especially on her hair as you were saying? I really like this peice, please finish it!
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Member # Joined: 21 Sep 2000 Posts: 216 Location: griswold,ct,usa
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Posted: Sun Dec 17, 2000 9:45 am |
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I like it Capn.
But i agree with Bradford. While the lineart is defining some areas, the sketchness of it in others is distracting. (The outline and shadows) I don't know if you were planing on leaving it, or just haven't defined the painting enough to remove it, and have us recognize the image. But I would take all of it, or most of it out.
I also agree on the lighting. You have that eerie illuminated green tube in the background. A strong green light from behing would help the mood out alot. A fog back there might be cool too. Have it thicker below and drifting through the door around her legs.
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Joachim member
Member # Joined: 18 Jan 2000 Posts: 1332 Location: Norway
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Posted: Sun Dec 17, 2000 11:13 am |
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looks cool. I like the idea very much. Her face could be a bit different (smaller nose ?) maybe put the face more down as if she is tired and shaky. Here's a brushover idea, maybe it could be cool a lightsetting like this ?!?...a cliche though, but more cinematic
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Member # Joined: 29 Nov 2000 Posts: 173 Location: isr
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Posted: Sun Dec 17, 2000 11:21 am |
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CapnPyro nice work BUT Joachim is better
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Member # Joined: 25 Mar 2000 Posts: 671 Location: Thousand Oaks, CA
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Posted: Mon Dec 18, 2000 12:47 am |
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haha! thanks guys!
bradford- i plan on defining it more, so i'll get rid of some of the sketchiness and draw in her hands and things
seraphire- i see what you mean, especially now because joachim did it pretty much the way suggested
joachim- thanks man, you made my day it's definetely alot more interesting that way, it's actually what i was trying to do, i was just to concerned with the light on the girls body. i also like the miscellaneous background things that i didnt add, like the doorjam, buttons, lights and tubes and smoke and things
cybergod- Oh hell, ya think?
Can't wait to get started redoing it, thanks guys!  |
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